So I've changed it so there is one camera, this way it focuses more on their acting then the joke at the end. (at first The last camera cut was going to reveal that the bird in the cage was dead)
At first I disliked losing the gag but now I'm kinda happy that there is more focus on the two characters. Also I couldn't find a bird rig.
Oh I also added a minute and a half of silence to have more time for his reaction.
All feedback is always appreciated. ^^
-Evan
2 comments:
I think the timing is working great. Maybe I would have more relax pose of the man on the right at the end, when he says 'you kill him?' to give him some contrast before and after he found out that he killed the bird. (maybe dropping his shoulders?)
I love the stageing and your poses, the timing is working great. I would maybe not have her look that far over the shoulder as you have her doing. You could tone it down and let the eyes just glide over for a bit.
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