Here's my blocking. I added a bit of lipsynch in it as well. Please tell me what I can do to make it better. Any ideas and suggestions will be appreciated.
I agree with Matthew, the last camera cut seems like a Jump Cut as it is now. I wouldn't do it. If you want his reaction then for the second cut have your camera at an angle where you can see both faces.
as for animation and poses I would not leave his hand on his head when he comes back up and I think that maybe you are repeating action choices like when he says "me" he holds his hands to the chest and when she says "I do" she dose the same action.
The timing seems good and I like how they you use the whole body in your motions. Lips sync is looking good.
Yeah, I agree that the last cut is not working. Maybe it is too fast, it might work if it is longer, so that you can show his reaction. Or maybe cut back to something similar to the first cut as her reaction is not the main point. The timing looks great, but some poses are too symmetrical i think.
I agree that the last camera cut is not working. Perhaps having the camera as either an over the shoulder or point of view shot on the woman might read better.
I also agree that the poses of each character are too symmetrical. Am wondering if you shot any video reference for this piece because some of the acting choices seem mechanical. For instance when the chefs says " I think...." him pointing to his head seems a bit much. Perhaps simplitying the hand gestures to just a few.
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This is looking good. I am not sure about that last camera cut. It might not be needed, unless you wanted to see the reaction from the male character.
I agree with Matthew, the last camera cut seems like a Jump Cut as it is now. I wouldn't do it. If you want his reaction then for the second cut have your camera at an angle where you can see both faces.
as for animation and poses I would not leave his hand on his head when he comes back up and I think that maybe you are repeating action choices like when he says "me" he holds his hands to the chest and when she says "I do" she dose the same action.
The timing seems good and I like how they you use the whole body in your motions. Lips sync is looking good.
Yeah, I agree that the last cut is not working. Maybe it is too fast, it might work if it is longer, so that you can show his reaction. Or maybe cut back to something similar to the first cut as her reaction is not the main point.
The timing looks great, but some poses are too symmetrical i think.
I agree that the last camera cut is not working. Perhaps having the camera as either an over the shoulder or point of view shot on the woman might read better.
I also agree that the poses of each character are too symmetrical. Am wondering if you shot any video reference for this piece because some of the acting choices seem mechanical. For instance when the chefs says " I think...." him pointing to his head seems a bit much. Perhaps simplitying the hand gestures to just a few.
Forget comment about video reference. Saw it and see how you came up with the hand gestures.
I'm guessing the last cut is about showing the cake as part of a gag - in which case you don't give it enough time for the bit to read.
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